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作文要求考生就改善校诊所服务写一份提案，内容应包括校诊所当前存在的问题和可能的解决措施。关于提案写作，在四级考试阶段，可以写成建议信的形式。抛开信件格式不谈，其写作步骤至少应包括以下几个方面：首先，进行自我介绍；其次，陈述问题；再次，提出解决办法；最后，做总结。只有涵盖以上几个方面，建议信的内容才算完整。
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Zhang Hua, a sophomore in our university. I am writing to offer some suggestions on how to improve the service of our school clinic. 1 As we all know, school-based health clinic programs have a positive impact on student growth and development. Each student should have access to a medical home that provides high-quality, continuous, and comprehensive health care services. 2
Currently, there are some problems in our school clinic. 3 First and foremost, 4 personnel shortages rank No. 1 on the list of my top concerns. Due to the shortage of medical staff, students have to wait long to see a doctor. School clinic should recruit more staff to better its service. Furthermore, 5 there is no mental counseling service due to the lack of mental health professionals. It is not uncommon that many students have been diagnosed with a mental health disorder. School clinic thus should hire professional mental health staff to treat those students' mental illness.
I would appreciate it a lot if you could take my suggestions into consideration. 6
Best wishes,
Zhang Hua
1 首先做自我介绍，并表明写信目的。
2 强调校诊所的重要性。
3 点明当前校诊所存在问题。
4 开始分点阐述，使用分点论述的表达first and foremost（首先）指出第一个问题：校诊所医务人员短缺，学生看病时间长。提出解决办法：雇佣更多医务人员。
5 使用分点表述用语Furthermore（其次，此外）提出第二个问题：校诊所没有心理咨询专业人员，无法提供心理咨询服务。提出相应解决办法：引进人才，聘用心理健康专业人士，为学生的心理健康保驾护航。
6 最后一段表达希望建议被采纳的愿望。
尊敬的先生/女士：
我叫张华，是我校大二学生。我写信是想就如何提高我们学校诊所的服务提出一些建议。我们都知道，校诊所项目对学生的成长和发展有积极的影响。每个学生都应该有机会获得一个医疗之所，一个能够提供高质量、持续和全面的卫生保健服务的地方。
目前，我们学校诊所存在一些问题。首先，人员短缺是我最关心的问题。由于医务人员短缺，学生们不得不等很长时间去看医生。校诊所应该招聘更多的员工来改善服务。此外，由于缺乏心理健康专业人员，校诊所没有心理咨询服务。许多学生被诊断出患有心理健康疾病，这并不罕见。因此，校诊所应该聘请专业的心理健康人员来治疗这些学生的心理疾病。
如果您能考虑我的建议，我将不胜感激。
最美好的祝愿
张华
have a positive impact on 对……有积极影响
personnel shortage 人员紧缺
professional 专业人士，职业人士
recruit 雇佣，聘用
be diagnosed with 被诊断为
have access to 使用；接近；可以利用
rank 排名，将……列为
mental health disorder 心理健康疾病
top concerns 最关心的问题
take...into consideration 把……考虑在内
currently 当前，目前
due to 由于
1 I am writing to offer some suggestions on...
句型意为“我写信是想就……提出一些建议”，是写建议信的常用句式。
2 It is not uncommon that...
句型意为“……并不罕见”，是指出某个问题的常用句式，强调这一问题并不罕见，应引起重视。
3 I would appreciate it...if you could...
句型意为“如果你能……我将不胜感激”，是希望对方采纳建议或做某事的常用句式，是礼貌而有力量的表达，让对方不好意思拒绝。
一群 a flock of
叼走 take away; carry...off in one's mouth
放羊 herd the sheep
修/补 mend; repair
窟窿 hole
补救 remedy; fixing
显然 obviously; apparently
损失 loss
Once upon a time, there was a man who kept a flock of sheep. One morning he was going out to herd the sheep when he found one was missing. Observing carefully, he saw a hole in the sheepfold. Obviously, a wolf must have got into the sheepfold at night and taken the sheep away.
His neighbor advised him to repair the sheepfold, but he turned a deaf ear.
The next day, he found that the wolf took away another sheep through the hole. Remembering what his neighbor had said, he hurried to block up the hole and mended the sheepfold. Since then, he never lost a sheep to the wolves again.
The moral of the story is that fixing things when they go wrong can prevent a bigger loss.
1. 第一句 ： “从前有个人”常翻译成Once upon a time, there was a man；“养了一群羊”翻译成定语从句，修饰“人”，即who kept a flock of sheep，其中“养”用keep来表达。
2. 第二句： 既可以翻译成One morning he was going out to herd the sheep when he found one was missing.（使用的是be going to do sth. when...的句式），也可以直接翻译成One morning he was ready to go out to herd the sheep and he found one of them was gone。
3. 第三句 ： “仔细一看”可以处理为伴随状语，翻译成现在分词短语Observing carefully。
4. 第四句 ： “钻进羊圈”翻译为must have got into the sheepfold，其中must have done表示肯定推测；“叼走了羊”翻译为taken the sheep away。
5. 第五句 ： “邻居劝他修羊栏”翻译成His neighbor advised him to repair the sheepfold，使用的是advise sb. to do sth.这一结构；“但他不听”可翻译成but he turned a deaf ear，其中turn a deaf ear是固定短语，意为“不听，置之不理”，当然该分句也可直接翻译成but he didn't listen。
6. 第六句 ： “第二天”翻译成The next day；“通过窟窿”翻译成through the hole。
7. 第七句 ： “想起邻居的话”处理为伴随状语，翻译成现在分词结构Remembering what his neighbor had said；“赶快”翻译成hurried to；“堵上”翻译成block up。
8. 第八句 ： “此后”翻译成since then；“他的羊再也没有被狼叼走”即“他的羊再也没有落入狼口”，故可翻译成he never lost a sheep to the wolves again。
9. 第九句 ： “故事告诉我们”可翻译为The moral of the story is，其中moral表示“寓意”，还可直接翻译成The story tells us that...；“出了问题及时补救，可以防止蒙受更大损失”既可以翻译成fixing things when they go wrong can prevent a bigger loss，也可以翻译成timely remedy can prevent further losses。