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体裁：记叙文 难度：★★★ 话题：坚强的跑者 关键词：determination 词数：318 建议时间：25分钟 题源：2022年新高考I卷
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1:
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
文章讲述了残疾男孩David要参加一场越野比赛，因害怕受到他人的嘲笑，David临阵退缩，作者作为学校的特殊教育老师，伸出援手，鼓励David完成这项艰巨的赛事。
1. warm up 热身
2. look around 环顾四周
3. search for 寻找
4. laugh at 嘲笑
5. make sure 确保
6. prevent ... from ... 阻止……做……
7. think of ... as ... 把……看作……
8. be familiar with 熟悉（某事/某物）
1. 原文 I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened.
译文 我很快在人群中找到了学校教练，然后问他发生了什么事请。
分析 本句为主从复合句。and连接两个并列谓语；在第二个谓语中含有what引导的宾语从句。
2. 原文 After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
译文 在确信如果David想要跑就能跑的情况后，我转身发现他朝我走来，他弱小的身体随着脚步的往前甩动也随之来回晃动。
分析 句中介词after后跟动名词作宾语，动名词短语中that引导的宾语从句为主从复合句，if引导条件状语从句；主句中coming towards me为现在分词作宾语补足语；his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward为独立主格结构作状语。
1. 把握前文要义：前文讲述了残疾男孩David决定放弃自己长期准备的比赛，作者打算伸出援手帮助他完成这项艰巨的赛事。
2. 原文信息：toothy smile、hesitated、laugh at、regular kid、be familiar with、challenges
3. 构思续文：作者安慰David并且鼓励他重拾自信；David成功完成了赛事，他们相拥而泣。
4. 注意要求：续写要求150词左右；应围绕“David重拾信心、完成赛事”展开。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn ' t look at me. I came close to him and said gently, “Why did you decide to give up the event? You have prepared it for a long time.” David lowered his head, crying softly. After a few minutes, he raised his head, tears in his eyes, “I don't want to be made fun of in public.” I smiled, tapping him on the shoulder, “You are an excellent student. You are a brave boy with great determination. You should believe in yourself.” Hearing my words, he stood up slowly and walked towards the running field.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The cross-country run began and David kept up with the team tightly. An hour later, they could see the finishing line in the distance. I waved at him, clapping my hands loudly, “Come on! Come on!” At last, he came to the finishing line and hugged me firmly, sweat mixed with tears rolling down his cheeks. “You are successful and you defeat yourself,” I shouted at him.
◆点评 本篇学生范文与原文衔接密切，动作和心理描述恰当，而且词汇和句式的应用也比较贴切。比如：come close to、lower one's head、raise one's head、clap one's hands的运用，以及现在分词作状语等。需要改进的地方：内容的衔接与顺畅度有待提高。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn ' t look at me. I tapped him on the shoulder gently, touched his soft hair, and whispered to him, “Could you tell me the reason why you decided to quit the event? You have practiced so hard and long.” David buried his face in his hands, weeping. After a few minutes, he raised his head with watery eyes, “I don't want to be laughed at in public.” I smiled, staring at the far distance, “You have no difference with other students in my heart. As a brave boy with great determination, you should have faith in yourself.” Hearing my words, he rose to his feet slowly and walked towards the running field.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The cross-country run began and David held up his head high, wearing a confident smile on his face. I followed them, cheering on him from behind. An hour later, the finishing line was within sight. David stepped toughly towards the line, sweat rolling down his cheeks. I clapped my hands, “Come on! Come on!” Eventually, he came to the finishing line and dived into my arms, hugging me tightly. “You make it and your hard practice has paid off,” I cried loudly.
1. tap sb. on the shoulder 拍某人的肩膀
2. bury one's face in one's hands 以手掩面
3. stare at 凝视
4. have faith in 信任（某人）
5. rise to one's feet 站起来
6. cheer on sb. 给某人加油
7. within sight 在视野之内
8. pay off 获得回报；取得成功
1. Hearing my words, he rose to his feet slowly and walked towards the running field. （主句中and连接两个并列谓语；hearing引导的现在分词作状语，表主动。）
2. David stepped toughly towards the line, sweat rolling down his cheeks.（sweat rolling down his cheeks为独立主格结构作伴随状语。）
◆点评 本篇范文的精彩之处在于用较多的高级词汇和高级句式来描写动作和心理活动。比如：tap、touch、whisper、quit、bury、weep、raise等动词的运用，使得故事情节更加丰富；而现在分词作状语和独立主格结构的使用，则使得文章的衔接更加简练而紧密。另外，文章和原文的融合度也比较高，一气呵成。总之，这是一篇不错的好范文。