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体裁：记叙文 难度：★★★ 话题：孩子为母亲做爱心早餐 关键词：breakfast 词数：310 建议时间：25分钟 题源：2021年新高考I卷
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
本文讲述了一对双胞胎为了使母亲度过一个温馨的母亲节，自己动手为母亲准备早餐的故事。虽然他们连连失败，但是在父亲的帮助下，最终成功把早餐献给了母亲。
1. be filled with 装满；充满
2. turn on 打开（电器等）
3. heat up 加热
4. turn down （把火）关小
5. shoot out of 从……喷射而出
6. put out 扑灭（火等）
7. turn off 关闭（电器等）
8. stay calm 保持镇静
1. 原文 The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.
译文 当他们想到要在母亲节这天给母亲一个惊喜时，这对双胞胎内心充满了喜悦。
分析 本句为主从复合句。as引导时间状语从句；they were planning for Mother's Day为定语从句，省略关系词that，修饰先行词surprise。
2. 原文 They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.
译文 他们在制作法式吐司的同时，把一些大米倒进一锅水里将其煮沸。
分析 本句为主从复合句。while引导时间状语从句；主句中and连接两个并列谓语。
1. 把握前文要义：本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了一对双胞胎为了给母亲惊喜，自己动手做早餐，期间遇到了一些麻烦。
2. 原文信息：Mother's Day、twins、boil、burnt、cooked、a mess、their father
3. 构思续文：父亲帮助完成早餐；母亲非常感动。
4. 注意要求：续写词数要求150左右；应围绕“父亲的帮助和母亲的感受”来展开。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Father approached them, wearing a smile on his face. He bent down and directed them on how to prepare the breakfast. They began making the bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was important for it. After some time, the tasty breakfast was ready for their mother. How happy they were!
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When seeing the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, their mother was very astonished, staring at them and knowing nothing to say. It was unbelievable that the two children could finish cooking breakfast for her. Mother threw her arms and hugged them tightly, kissing them again and again. The children said loudly and proudly, "Merry Mother's Day!”
◆点评 本篇学生习作根据两段首句提示，紧随原文要义，详细描述故事的细节和情景。在词汇和语法结构上有些地方还是值得赞扬和推荐的，比如：approach、bend down、stare at、unbelievable等词汇的应用；省略句、that引导的主语从句、现在分词短语作伴随状语等语法结构的使用。需要改进的地方：字数太少，个别细节处需多使用一些复合句，以使文章更富层次感。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Father's arrival gave the children self-confidence. Under the direction of their father, they took positive actions and started all over again. They made the bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father assisted them to adjust the fire, which was the key to success. It was all right this time. Tasty breakfast was ready. How delighted they were!
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. On seeing the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, their mother was too astonished to say a word. It was not only the present, but the love of the children for her that touched her very much. It was beyond her expectation that the two children could finish cooking breakfast for her. The children said proudly and loudly, "Happy Mother's Day!" Mother hugged them firmly and kissed them again and again.
1. under the direction of 在……的指导下
2. take positive actions 采取积极行动
3. adjust the fire 调整火力
4. the key to success 成功的关键
1. It was not only the present, but the love of the children for her that touched her very much.（本句为强调句，强调“not only ... but (also) ...”连接的两个并列主语。）
2. On seeing the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, their mother was too astonished to say a word.（“on + doing”相当于as soon as，表示“一……就……”；“too ... to ...”表示“太……以至于不能……”。）
◆点评 本篇范文高级句式和词汇的使用给人印象深刻，比如：under the direction of、take positive actions等词汇的应用；语法结构方面强调句和非限定性定语从句的应用等。这些都是值得我们学习和借鉴的。另外文章细节的衔接、内容的逻辑性、与原文的融合度等方面都非常出色。