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体裁：记叙文 难度：★★★ 话题：让老狗重拾快乐 关键词：dog 词数：348 建议时间：25分钟 题源：2020年1月浙江卷
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
"I'm going to miss you so much, Poppy ," said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents , and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. "I guess this is it," he said. "I'll see you back home in a month, okay?" His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy's mother turned to the dog , "Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn't.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried.
"What should we do to cheer Poppy up?" asked Dad. "We've tried everything.”
"I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy," smiled Mom. "Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let's get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn't take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box , she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
文章讲述了男孩上大学后，家里的狗Poppy非常失落，于是男孩的父母决定收养一只小狗给Poppy做伴。
1. bend down 俯身；弯腰
2. get the better of打败；占上风
3. keep ... under control 使……得以控制
4. at least 至少
5. out of sight 在视野之外
6. turn to sb. 转向某人；求助某人
7. as usual 像平常一样
1. 原文 They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying.
译文 他们驱车几个小时把儿子送到这所大学，这儿不久就是他生活和学习的地方。
分析 本句为主从复合句。where引导定语从句，修饰先行词the university。
2. 原文 His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents.
译文 他的父母点点头，然后注视着儿子融入众多学生和他们父母的人流中，直到看不见身影。
分析 本句为and连接的两个并列句。在第二个并列句中，as引导时间状语从句。
1. 把握前文要义：前文讲述了男孩上大学后，自己家的狗Poppy郁郁寡欢，于是男孩父母决定收养一只小狗给Poppy做伴。
2. 原文信息：Poppy、parents、university、hug、watch、dog、back、cheerful、box
3. 构思续文：小狗的到来使Poppy感到兴奋；儿子回家后惊讶和惊喜的状态。
4. 注意要求：续写词数要求150左右；应围绕“小狗到来所带来的影响和变化”展开。
Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. A small head stuck out of the box and looked around curiously. Poppy was surprised at the little thing. She wagged her tail wildly and barked with joy. The little dog was not shy at all and immediately started running and jumping around the older dog. They chased each other around the parents and seemed as if they hadn't seen for a long time. The parents looked at the dogs, smiling and relieved.
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had missed Poppy and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down to give her a big hug , he was amazed to see a little dog following behind Poppy. "Oh my god, who is this?" he opened his eyes wide. His parents laughed at the confused look on his face. "That's Pee-wee," said Dad. "I can't believe you got yourselves a puppy!" "We didn't," replied Mom. "This puppy is for Poppy!”
◆点评 本篇学生习作根据两段首句提示展开续写，并且与原文衔接密切，能够利用高中阶段的常用词汇和句式进行描述，比如：词汇方面运用stick out of、look around、look forward to等；语法结构方面使用现在分词作状语、时间状语从句等。需要改进的地方：细节的衔接还需进一步加强；高级词汇的应用有待提高。
Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. A lovely little head reached out of the box . Then the box was tipped over sideways, and out came a mass of golden silliness. Poppy was astonished. She wagged her tail wildly, barking with delight. She smelled the pup gently as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was not shy and immediately started following and jumping around the older dog . "That didn't take long," remarked Mom, as both dogs went running around the house as a communicated game of chase. Dad laughed.
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He hadn't seen Poppy for a long time and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down to give her a big hug , he fell into amazement as a small golden pup came racing up to lick his face too. "Oh my god, who is this?" he yelled. His parents laughed at his confused and shocked look. "That's our new member," said Dad. "I can't believe you got yourselves a puppy!" "We didn't," replied Mom. "This puppy is for Poppy!”
1. reach out of 从……伸出
2. tip over 翻倒；打翻
3. a mass of 一团；大量的
4. look forward to 期望；期待
5. fall into 陷入
1. Then the box was tipped over sideways, and out came a mass of golden silliness.（and连接两个并列句；第二个并列句为完全倒装结构。）
2. When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell into amazement as a small golden pup came racing up to lick his face too.（when引导时间状语从句；主句中又含有as引导的时间状语从句，racing为现在分词作伴随状语。）
◆点评 本篇范文描写详略得当，使用了较多的高级词汇和句式。比如：词汇方面应用a mass of、reach out of、look forward to等高级词汇；语法结构方面使用现在分词作状语、时间状语从句、完全倒装结构等高级句式。本文的细节刻画非常生动，比如：利用tip over、lick his face等短语来描述小狗的可爱。另外，文章上下文逻辑紧凑、内容衔接紧密，是一篇高质量的写作。